Hey Bridget, I am Jaimie and I go to St Bernadette's school. I like the way you have colour coded you and your friends looking at Jamie Duff's race car. Maybe next time you could add a bit more information like: did you get to see Jamie duff up close? did he race or drive the race car around your school? It would be nice if you added a little bit more information because you really hooked me in. But anyway great use of language to explain about Jamie Duff. I am looking forward to reading more of the work posted on your blog.
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Hey Bridget, I am Jaimie and I go to St Bernadette's school. I like the way you have colour coded you and your friends looking at Jamie Duff's race car. Maybe next time you could add a bit more information like: did you get to see Jamie duff up close? did he race or drive the race car around your school? It would be nice if you added a little bit more information because you really hooked me in. But anyway great use of language to explain about Jamie Duff. I am looking forward to reading more of the work posted on your blog.
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