This past week, the story tellers writing group have been planning and writing their own narrative story. Enjoy!

A big problem

   Once upon a time there was a Detective and a fairy crew. The Detective lived in a pirate ship made out of wood. The fairy lived in a big mushroom. With white spots and red all over. One day the Detective found a spooky rat as big as a kitten. And as poisenous as can be. The Detective sets out on a Journey. The Detective found a magic pencil. However the magic pencil goes wild and the Detective drops the pencil and walks away . The pencil was the fairy’s and without the pencil the fairies can’t fly. The Detective found the fairies cottage the fairies got cooked for lunch because the Detective had no lunch for 2 week’s.

THE END the next story comming soon.

Camp letter

WALT: Write a letter to a camp parent or camp leader

Use paragraphs for each new idea

Use interesting words

Edit our writing with a buddy to make it even better

Reflect on our writing using a rubric

If your parent went on camp, please write a letter to another person and give your own parent a big hug next time you see them.

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14 / 3 / 2016

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Kari / Rimu

Yaldhurst Model School

Christchurch

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Dear Ash,

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(Paragraph 1): In this paragraph you introduce yourself and thank the person for being at camp (at least 30 words).

Key words: enjoyed, fantastic, awesome, challenging, tiring, delicious, scrumptious, crazy, parents, Hammer Springs, Forest Camp

Hi my name is BRIDGET. I am from yaldhurst school and I was in your group for tree cimping and I liked how you teached all the students about climbing.

(Paragraph 2): In this paragraph you tell your person what you enjoyed about camp and what you remember most about the person that you are writing to (at least 40 words).

Key words: hydro slide, tree climbing, waterfall track, mountain, mission impossible, orienteering, grass, Conical Hill, paint game, lazy river, Rusty Carrot, Activity Hammer, swimming, hot pools, thermal, sliding, water slide, cabins, tiring, tidying

I liked tree climbing and when I got to the top of the tree and when I went on  the lazy river and the hydro slide and the thermal pools I liked how you sporting us at tree climbing

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(Paragraph 3): In this paragraph you ask the person some questions about their camp experience. These should be questions that you actually want an answer to (at least 30 words).

Key words:

How do you enjoy teaching schools when thay come? what is your favorite school? how many schools have gone to activity hammer? Why did you pick to work at activity hammer?

(Paragraph 4): This is the concluding paragraph where you thank the person again for taking part, sum up your feelings about camp this year and end with a positive comment about the person (at least 30 words).

Key words:

Write here:

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Yours sincerely

Bridget