rainmaker
Once on a sandy beach. There was boats lots of boats. When I was walking along the beach I realized that there was no water. So I went to go find water. First I have to find something to get around in. So I go and have a little walk around. Suddenly I find an aeroplane a mini one. So I hop in it and lift of. i am i the sky for once in my life . My dream was to fly. Now i just need to find the cloud and make it rain. suddenly there is 3 other planes attacking me randomly the bigger plane apers shooting the 3 planes in one shot and we were fighting over the one cloud until i had put my special water changer on it and then I got shot
when we wached the video the class only wached up to where the girl spots a cloud and then we whent away to plan out our writing. I red it through after I had finished writing.Here is the video.
Here is how I created my story
when we wached the video the class only wached up to where the girl spots a cloud and then we whent away to plan out our writing. I red it through after I had finished writing.Here is the video.
Here is how I created my story
I planed it out on paper 
Can I please have some feed back on what you think I could inprove on in a narritive.
What a wonderfully imaginative piece of writing. How great it would be to be able to fly. I would hope that the character survives and goes on to have many more wonderful adventures. Where would she fly to next?
ReplyDeleteI look forward to your next blog post.
Kia Ora Bridget my name is Cailey and i'm from Owairaka District School I really like your rainmaker story I understand it, it's great I hope you have a good day at your school good job!
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Hey Bridget,
ReplyDeleteI am Jade C from the Summer Learning Journey team 2018. I will be reading your blog posts this summer along with Hazel, Rachel, and Jade F.
I really enjoyed your presentation about your narrative writing. It's awesome to see that you are an active blogger even in school holidays. I like how you have included photographs to support your explanations and descriptions about your planning process of writing a narrative story.
We are thrilled that you've registered for the Summer Learning Journey with us. I know it can sometimes be tricky to get started. I have included a link to the week one activities, but remember, you can do them in any order! Check out the activities on our website, and then post your responses to the activities here on your blog site.
https://sites.google.com/site/summerlearningjourney/weekly-activities/week-one
I am looking forward to read more of your amazing activity posts!
Jade C. :)