My Summer Learning Journey
Day 1 - Arriving in New Zealand (1800-1870)
Activity 2 - Setting Sail.
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| The waka that we travelled in. |
Dear Peter
I'm writing to tell you about my journey to New Zealand. I was nine years old when we left our country and I was sixteen when I got here, it was a bumpy long ride with my family and lots of other families from our town. I didn't really want to leave but it was the right thing to do, I miss all my friends. It was very cold at night, we would lie down and spot all of the pictures out of the stars,we had big buckets in the middle of the waka to scoop all the water out after the big waves hit us. We had lots of fish to eat, all the fish we wanted, we would go fishing every night when they come out to hunt for their food. We left to go find a new land because there was not enough space for us so we decided to leave and give someone else our house, we would start a new community with our own rules and good food. Please write back.
Yours sincerely,
Bridget
Hey Bridget,
ReplyDeleteThis is Jade C from the Summer Learning Journey blogging team. Yay, you have completed activity 2 as well! You have made a great start to the programme! Keep up the great work!
This is a well-written letter that clearly and thoroughly explains and describes your journey to the New Island! (Which is New Zealand). I especially loved this line "we would lie down and spot all of the pictures out of the stars,we had big buckets in the middle of the waka to scoop all the water out after the big waves hit us." I think you are an amazing writer as you can set the scene in a way that the reader can imagine and picture the scene in our mind. Well done for another great work!
All the best,
Jade C.
Hi Jade, thank you for your feedback. I did mean new land, as we were travelling to find new land. We didn't know where we would end up. Thanks for your kind words, Bridget.
DeleteHi Briget, My name is Abby and I am a year 6 Student at Yaldhurst Model School (YMS for short).
ReplyDeleteI Really Liked the part about how you wrote it like a letter, Did you have to do it or did you choose to?
This Reminded me when I always for all my stories had me in it, like Making up a story of my life that's not true.
Great! I like how you put yourself into the letter instead of making it someone else it really helps your story.
Sincerely, Abby.
Thank you Abby,Yes I did write A letter Althogh I didint need to. Thank you for your comment.
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