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Wednesday, May 15, 2019

Imagine you live under water

Hello Bloggers, Yesterday we wrote a story about this picture below.We had to use our 5 senses wich are Hear, See, Smell,Taste and touch. We also had to use Personafication, Simlies, Sets of 3 adjectives and more. But I kinda diddnt use to many of them. So here is my story. In the blue is the story starter.
I was the only person who had taken notice of the warning. A great flood had swept over the planet, and now my life was very different

Quite different, so different that I no longer
heard the sound of birds twittering on the
sunny mornings, or the dogs barking at the
dog park. I only heard water smashing
against the glass like the sound of a lion
roaring. Day after day I could only smell
the stuffy air that was trapped in this big
glass house. The smoky fire starts too
burn than that minute I could suddenly
smell smoke. Although the fire was
keeping me warm the smell was horrible.
I was hungry so hungry that I had so
much food in the cupboard that I wanted
too go and fill myself up. But I couldn't
other wise I would have no food left.
Unless there is a fish food deliverer,
or something stupid like that. I started
too get cold. I wanted too go inside
too get a jersey but my house was
probably too dangerous too go inside
of so I stayed outside in my backyard
and sat by the fire.

Later that day a fish swam up too the tank
I think the fish was attracted too the fire
and the stayed there for a while. The fish
was as shiny as a Yellow star the  glisend
in the light I stared too tall too him. I felt I
finally had a friend I asked him if he knew
were a supermarket or a food store is
because I NEED more food. He swam
over too a different side of the tank I
walked over too it and poked it…

It was a door AHH! A door handle popped out
 I jumped it shook the tank round and round.
I opened the door Water came in but then it
disappeared the ocean water got even lower
I closed the door in a hurry.

1 comment:

  1. Hi Bridget
    My name is Bethan and I'm from Pt England school in east Auckland. I've read you're story and i think it's very creative. Although the spelling was a bit off I think if you had reread the story it would have been great! What inspired you to Write this story? Keep up the great work and remember to reread your work.
    Cheers
    Bethan

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